9 comments on “Chapter 1 of Shadow Within A City; a distrubing look into a sad child…

  1. Well written. I like pace into it. As constructive criticism, since you mentioned: The images work except the last two, but not enough for me to not think this is very good. Thanks for the share!

    • Hey, greatly appreciate the feedback. I see your point on the two pics at the end. They a little “out of place.” Happy to hear that the flow of the first chapter was good.

    • Very true, a monster indeed and you know what. sometimes showing pity on what the monster loss isn’t a bad thing. Thanks for the feedback. It was very insightful and that was what we wanted people to see about the young Simms…

  2. Great work! I found it easy to follow and empathize with the main character. There were some minor grammatical errors, but certainly nothing that detracted from the storyline.

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